Here is a model composition suitable for Primary 5 & 6 - "Quick thinking." Below you will find an essay (DRAFT 2) written by one of our students. Our students go through multiple drafts. What you will find in this blogpost is the improved final draft of the composition. Model composition: Quick thinking (example)
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Model composition for primary 6: Quick thinking
Student: Kate, P5 (Improved version)
Pictures given: Stranger offering candy
Model composition for primary 6: Quick thinking
Tuition has finally ended! As I stepped out of the tuition centre, the cool night breeze brushed a strand of hair against my face. The streets were dark, and the only sources of light were the street lamps along the pavement. I waved goodbye to my friends and began to walk home. As I was strolling down the dark alley, I suddenly heard soft footsteps behind me. I turned around and saw a tall man in a black suit.
“Would you like candy, little girl?” He said this as he offered me a piece of candy.
Sensing that it was a trap to kidnap me, I shook my head and began walking as fast as I could to the other end of the alley. He attempted to grab my wrist and asked me again if I would like candy. I tried to wrestle my wrist from his iron grip. Since I could not get away, I decided to use my leg to kick his stomach. It took him by surprise, and he loosened his grip on me. I took this opportunity to run. While running, I took out my phone from my pocket and started dialling nine-nine-nine. I could hear the man panting as he ran after me. After telling the policeman the location of the alley, he instructed me to hide behind boxes and wait for some policemen to arrive. I spotted some boxes and dove behind them.
Moments later, I could hear the man’s ragged breathing as he looked for me. Terrified, my hands trembled, and my lips quivered. Silent tears began falling from my face. I was afraid that this would be the end of my life. I was afraid that he would find me.
After what felt like an eternity, I could finally hear the police sirens. The man realised this too and took off running. Some policemen chased after him while policewomen looked for me. When they found me, tears were streaming down my face. My face was buried in my hands. They comforted me and commended me for my quick thinking until my parents arrived. I immediately rushed to my parents when they arrived at the alley. They heaved a huge sigh of relief and hugged me tightly, wiping my tears. I saw the man sitting in the police car. He shot me a dirty look before the policeman drove off.
After this incident, I have learned that quick thinking can save my life.
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