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Model Composition: Friendship - Gloria (Primary 3)

Here is a model composition suitable for Primary 3 - "Friendship." Below you will find an essay (DRAFT 2) written by one of our students. Our students go through multiple drafts. What you will find in this blogpost is the improved final draft of the composition. Friendship


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Model composition: Friendship (Primary 3)

Student: Gloria, P3 (Improved version)

Picture chosen: A plate of food.





Model composition: Friendship (Primary 3)

Model composition: Friendship (Primary 3)


Gloria, Peiying Primary school


Student: Gloria

Picture used: A plate of food

It was a sunny day. The clouds were like marshmallows. I was in the school canteen. The canteen was packed like sardines. In the corner of my eyes, I saw Jim. Jim was born with a silver spoon in his mouth. Jim’s teeth sparkled like diamonds. He even has a personal chauffer and he always looked dapper. None of us dared to speak to Jim, because we felt like peasants. Little did I know that I am going to be friends with Jim by the end of the day.


          As I did not eat in the morning, I was hungry as a wolf. As I wanted to buy my food. However, I found out that I did not bring my wallet. My face turned as pale as a sheet. I looked at everyone eating their food happily. My stomach rumbled noisily.


          What happened next was unexpected. Someone patted on my shoulder. It was Jim. He bought me a plate of food. My eyes sparkled with delight as I thanked him profusely. I was touched by his kindness.


          From that day on, Jim and I became friends. His kindness was etched in the deep recesses of my mind.






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