Here is a model composition suitable for Primary 3 - "Overcoming fear." Below you will find an essay (DRAFT 2) written by one of our students. Our students go through multiple drafts. What you will find in this blogpost is the improved final draft of the composition. Overcoming fear composition.
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Model composition: Overcoming fear
Student: Chin Pin Yuan, P3 (Improved version)
Pictures given: Stage
Overcoming fear composition (Primary 3)
Chin Pin Yuan, Chongfu Primary
Student: Chin Pin Yuan
Picture used: Stage
The sky was an azure blue. The sun was like a fireball in the sky. Marshmallow clouds dotted across the sky. I was in a auditorium. I was going to take part in a violin contest. I nervously swallowed the lump in my throat. I stood with jelly-like knees as I waited for my teacher to call me to the stage. Butterflies fluttered in my stomach as I wobbled to the stage. Little did I know something surprising was going to happen.
The auditorium was packed like sardines. When I saw the crowd, I almost fainted. When I saw the sea of faces, my mind became blank. I forgot how to play the violin. My face turned as white as a ghost. Sweat dotted across my face. I wanted to give up.
Hoots of laughter escaped from the crowd. My face turned as red as a tomato. Tears flowed like a river down my cheeks. I was about to give up. What happened next was shocking. Among the crowd, I saw my mother encouraging me by mouthing the words, “You can do it!” Upon seeing that, I felt encouraged. With renewed energy, I played the violin melodiously.
After the contest, I thanked my mother for encouraging me. Fear makes the wolf bigger than he is. Thanks to her, I overcame my fear.
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